07-21-2007, 05:53 PM
Widzę, że komentujecie tutaj czyjeś wymysły. Chciałbym Was spytać, czy to co mi się kiedyś napisało, i co wykorzystuję w kapelce nadaje się do czegoś innego prócz wyrzucenia, lub natychmiastowej korekty i zmiany konceptu ?
1. Bitch's autographe
Open your window
Begin your new life
You're a widow
husband died decade ago
Your new man is rich
and he's got a big car
Your life is so empty
but now you ain't popular.
Hey hey are you a porno star ?
hello - nice to meet you
Hey hey - are you givin' autographs
hello - nice to meet you
Your new man makes a movies
not for the kids
full of nice womans
stolen from the space
your life's different now
more wrinkles on the face;
you're so experienced
nice to meet legend !
Hey hey are you a porno star ?
hello - nice to meet you
Hey hey - are you givin' autographs
hello - nice to meet you
porno star nice to meet you
porno star nice to meet you
bitch !
solo
Now close your window
do not close your door
You better should find
who killed your last love
He was making better movies
not the trumpery
So listen what I say
Read better screenplays.
Hey hey are you a porno star ?
hello - nice to meet you
Hey hey - are you givin' autographs
hello - nice to meet you
sexual beast is carrying disease
bitch's autograph
2. Are you a victim of the snake ?
Some snake will bite us
but it doesn't care about time
Some road we will crawl
to dry and empty town
Some poison we're strangling
So Goddamn our last breath
One liquid in our throats
will destroy the enemy - death
Every name will loose the sense
Hapinness will be banned by glare
They'll lead us to the one road
it's dark but it's lack of light
It's time to escape quickly
until the thrill will paralyze
It's time to escape quickly
until the thrill will paralyze
The world is a ruin
almost the destroyed bridge
here's no one to say he's guilty
we can only swear
Ref.
Are you a victim of the snake ?
could you stand up please ?
Do you want to spill the venom on me
you said it tasted like juice
Are you a victim of the snake
did snow cover your soul ?
You are going to stop the time
Are you desireous so much ?
Crawl slowly into your abbys
watch your last dawn
Put the hat on and say goodbye
before you'll leave this room tonight
Did the reason of your changing
was venom swimming in your blood ?
You killed soul, you killed life
planged your hand in the river of the crime
Good lawyer won't help you
he'll only say his fairytales
Shall take your money, shake your hand
but he know that he made mistake
Pass the lamps which give the light
in this sad and empty day
Pass the trees, pass the leafes
in this sad and empty day
Ref.
Are you a victim of the snake
could you stand up, please ?
Do you want to spill the venom on me
you said it tasted like juice
Are you victim of the snake
did snow cover your soul ?
You are going to stop the time
Are you desireous so much ?
I am still alive, you bastard snake oh
I am still alive, you bastard snake o h
I am still alive, you bastard snake oh
I am still alive, you bastard snake o h
3. Execution
Don't talk about a friendship
but you know nothing
but you know fuckin' nothing about it
Don't talk about a loyalty
but you know nothing
but you know fuckin' nothing about it
His friend Satan in suit with tie
he has a gun in his hand
He came to him when he was sleeping
and wanted to get his money back
But it's to late
to repair the mistakes
so dig your grave
soon you'll be dead
Don't talk about a friendship
but you know nothing
but you know fuckin' nothing about it
Don't talk about a loyalty
but you know nothing
but you know fuckin' nothing about it
He started crying, but Satan laughed
and gave his own shavel
Listen man, here you'll end your life
and shot in his head
But it's to late
to repair the mistakes
so dig your grave
soon you'll be dead
I killed this bastard one
I'm going back to home
I'm sitting in the car
and left the corpse in garden alone
Don't talk about a friendship
but you know nothing
but you know fuckin' nothing about it
Don't talk about a loyalty
but you know nothing
but you know fuckin' nothing about it
His boss is so mighty king of hell
he likes to eat spaghetti on the lunch
Showed him next man he had to kill
he let him down and failed the contract
But it's to late
to repair the mistakes
so dig your grave
soon you'll be dead
4. My soul is only mine
My decision to swallow a pillow
and to close my tired eyes
oh it's time to make a deal
with devil or with God ?
Ohh how cruel is this frustration
which decision will be a better way ?
But I think that's most important
how much they're gonna pay ?
Would be good to end the mission
in some worthy style
Even dead wants to make his pile
to find the friends in hell
My friends I call them liars
but they've lied to me again
How strong can be desire
to see them in hell ?
Lost souls are screaming in the torment
in the large space of suffering
Even hero lost his omnipotence
bad omen comes true to him.
Here in hell they are all deceivers
told lies into my eyes
Time to try to go in heaven
maybe someone will sympathize ?
Smiles on faces are disappearing
and that's the thing I can't buy
Nobody's gonna play this business
but I'll be soon justified
Where is God, so tell me brother
does he see my destiny ?
I'm a man full of distress
and with no hope to purge my sins
In nowhere I walk alone
I praise my privacy
So I tell you my bad nightmare
Wish me prosperity !
I'd like to feel the atmosphere
of brutal days till my end
So I'll try in another place
and it's my final decision
Lost souls...
Here in hell...
"I hope someone forgive me
and give me his hand
In future I shall be better
I won't be fool again
Oh where is the light I've been looking for
Where is the door I've tried to knock at
but nobody opened me ?
I want to see the garden
full of pretty plants
I want to be only stoic
I want to find peace in myself
to stop being easy - going
to loose every sorrows
I don't need them to find happines
My soul is only mine"
5. Illumination of the weaks
This is the war - protect ourselfs
we've got no time - to run away
this is disease - face of brutality
without eyes and with leper hands
Ref.
Victim of war - rotting flesh of corpse
body is empty - the soul had gone
blood on the hands - bullet in the head
What did a human - the bringer of death ?
This is bloody war
done by people with brutality and the
pleasure to kill
to illuminate all of the weaks
to show them power and desire to rule
Ref.
hell on earth is coming
the darkest shadow above our brains
to land of predators with no respect
to every human being
and every citizen
who doesn't have a name
6. Narazie bez tytułu
Innocent dignity
was raped by
impious libertines
Young human became
the defenceless animal
and instead speaking - he barked
Conquered their weak minds
to feel so satisfied
with no fucking scruples
Conquered their young bodies
conquered future plans
Forbade them religion
it's to much superstitious
and tortured them in the name of sick lust
Perversion - to achieve the delight
so deprived the kids holy freedom
Searching rest was so ghastly
it's the grave - the confounded castle
Youthful rationalism
was replaced by
strongly eagerness
Forced to live in hell
with cruel, written rules
which nobody could deny
Conquered their weak minds
to feel so satisfied
with no fuckin scruples
Conquered their young bodies
conquered all their plans
Forbade them religion
it's to much superstitious
and tortured them in the name of sick lust
Inside the bloody walls
among the trails of massacre
bodies were looking for allevation
In this lustful game
the grave was a reward
life succumbed to desecration !
7. Now warrior feel the power of beer
NOW WARRIOR FEEL THE POWER OF BEER
Beer warriors
with steel
and power
Spilled beer
instead blood
in the battle
In the glory
of Gambrinus
we praise the liquid
Swallow quickly
before my sword
will cut your head off
Taste of beer we feel
scent of beer we smell
and big pleasure in our hearts
We are so proud
we are so loud
When we drink - noble nectar of gods
Our enemies
shall die
before the dawn
Soon we'll go
to the war
on battlefield
All abstainers
gonna meet this sword
beer will be our reward
So we hail
all beer warriors
with glory and pride !
Taste...
Next day
early morning
fire in the sky
swords in the wind
with power and might
do you want to die ?
We're so united
to defend
thrash metal's name
Heart of steel
crown and the ring
time to drink
powerfull nectar of gods !
Mógłbym prosić o opinie na temat tych tekstów ? Czy się nadają do czegoś itp ?
1. Bitch's autographe
Open your window
Begin your new life
You're a widow
husband died decade ago
Your new man is rich
and he's got a big car
Your life is so empty
but now you ain't popular.
Hey hey are you a porno star ?
hello - nice to meet you
Hey hey - are you givin' autographs
hello - nice to meet you
Your new man makes a movies
not for the kids
full of nice womans
stolen from the space
your life's different now
more wrinkles on the face;
you're so experienced
nice to meet legend !
Hey hey are you a porno star ?
hello - nice to meet you
Hey hey - are you givin' autographs
hello - nice to meet you
porno star nice to meet you
porno star nice to meet you
bitch !
solo
Now close your window
do not close your door
You better should find
who killed your last love
He was making better movies
not the trumpery
So listen what I say
Read better screenplays.
Hey hey are you a porno star ?
hello - nice to meet you
Hey hey - are you givin' autographs
hello - nice to meet you
sexual beast is carrying disease
bitch's autograph
2. Are you a victim of the snake ?
Some snake will bite us
but it doesn't care about time
Some road we will crawl
to dry and empty town
Some poison we're strangling
So Goddamn our last breath
One liquid in our throats
will destroy the enemy - death
Every name will loose the sense
Hapinness will be banned by glare
They'll lead us to the one road
it's dark but it's lack of light
It's time to escape quickly
until the thrill will paralyze
It's time to escape quickly
until the thrill will paralyze
The world is a ruin
almost the destroyed bridge
here's no one to say he's guilty
we can only swear
Ref.
Are you a victim of the snake ?
could you stand up please ?
Do you want to spill the venom on me
you said it tasted like juice
Are you a victim of the snake
did snow cover your soul ?
You are going to stop the time
Are you desireous so much ?
Crawl slowly into your abbys
watch your last dawn
Put the hat on and say goodbye
before you'll leave this room tonight
Did the reason of your changing
was venom swimming in your blood ?
You killed soul, you killed life
planged your hand in the river of the crime
Good lawyer won't help you
he'll only say his fairytales
Shall take your money, shake your hand
but he know that he made mistake
Pass the lamps which give the light
in this sad and empty day
Pass the trees, pass the leafes
in this sad and empty day
Ref.
Are you a victim of the snake
could you stand up, please ?
Do you want to spill the venom on me
you said it tasted like juice
Are you victim of the snake
did snow cover your soul ?
You are going to stop the time
Are you desireous so much ?
I am still alive, you bastard snake oh
I am still alive, you bastard snake o h
I am still alive, you bastard snake oh
I am still alive, you bastard snake o h
3. Execution
Don't talk about a friendship
but you know nothing
but you know fuckin' nothing about it
Don't talk about a loyalty
but you know nothing
but you know fuckin' nothing about it
His friend Satan in suit with tie
he has a gun in his hand
He came to him when he was sleeping
and wanted to get his money back
But it's to late
to repair the mistakes
so dig your grave
soon you'll be dead
Don't talk about a friendship
but you know nothing
but you know fuckin' nothing about it
Don't talk about a loyalty
but you know nothing
but you know fuckin' nothing about it
He started crying, but Satan laughed
and gave his own shavel
Listen man, here you'll end your life
and shot in his head
But it's to late
to repair the mistakes
so dig your grave
soon you'll be dead
I killed this bastard one
I'm going back to home
I'm sitting in the car
and left the corpse in garden alone
Don't talk about a friendship
but you know nothing
but you know fuckin' nothing about it
Don't talk about a loyalty
but you know nothing
but you know fuckin' nothing about it
His boss is so mighty king of hell
he likes to eat spaghetti on the lunch
Showed him next man he had to kill
he let him down and failed the contract
But it's to late
to repair the mistakes
so dig your grave
soon you'll be dead
4. My soul is only mine
My decision to swallow a pillow
and to close my tired eyes
oh it's time to make a deal
with devil or with God ?
Ohh how cruel is this frustration
which decision will be a better way ?
But I think that's most important
how much they're gonna pay ?
Would be good to end the mission
in some worthy style
Even dead wants to make his pile
to find the friends in hell
My friends I call them liars
but they've lied to me again
How strong can be desire
to see them in hell ?
Lost souls are screaming in the torment
in the large space of suffering
Even hero lost his omnipotence
bad omen comes true to him.
Here in hell they are all deceivers
told lies into my eyes
Time to try to go in heaven
maybe someone will sympathize ?
Smiles on faces are disappearing
and that's the thing I can't buy
Nobody's gonna play this business
but I'll be soon justified
Where is God, so tell me brother
does he see my destiny ?
I'm a man full of distress
and with no hope to purge my sins
In nowhere I walk alone
I praise my privacy
So I tell you my bad nightmare
Wish me prosperity !
I'd like to feel the atmosphere
of brutal days till my end
So I'll try in another place
and it's my final decision
Lost souls...
Here in hell...
"I hope someone forgive me
and give me his hand
In future I shall be better
I won't be fool again
Oh where is the light I've been looking for
Where is the door I've tried to knock at
but nobody opened me ?
I want to see the garden
full of pretty plants
I want to be only stoic
I want to find peace in myself
to stop being easy - going
to loose every sorrows
I don't need them to find happines
My soul is only mine"
5. Illumination of the weaks
This is the war - protect ourselfs
we've got no time - to run away
this is disease - face of brutality
without eyes and with leper hands
Ref.
Victim of war - rotting flesh of corpse
body is empty - the soul had gone
blood on the hands - bullet in the head
What did a human - the bringer of death ?
This is bloody war
done by people with brutality and the
pleasure to kill
to illuminate all of the weaks
to show them power and desire to rule
Ref.
hell on earth is coming
the darkest shadow above our brains
to land of predators with no respect
to every human being
and every citizen
who doesn't have a name
6. Narazie bez tytułu
Innocent dignity
was raped by
impious libertines
Young human became
the defenceless animal
and instead speaking - he barked
Conquered their weak minds
to feel so satisfied
with no fucking scruples
Conquered their young bodies
conquered future plans
Forbade them religion
it's to much superstitious
and tortured them in the name of sick lust
Perversion - to achieve the delight
so deprived the kids holy freedom
Searching rest was so ghastly
it's the grave - the confounded castle
Youthful rationalism
was replaced by
strongly eagerness
Forced to live in hell
with cruel, written rules
which nobody could deny
Conquered their weak minds
to feel so satisfied
with no fuckin scruples
Conquered their young bodies
conquered all their plans
Forbade them religion
it's to much superstitious
and tortured them in the name of sick lust
Inside the bloody walls
among the trails of massacre
bodies were looking for allevation
In this lustful game
the grave was a reward
life succumbed to desecration !
7. Now warrior feel the power of beer
NOW WARRIOR FEEL THE POWER OF BEER
Beer warriors
with steel
and power
Spilled beer
instead blood
in the battle
In the glory
of Gambrinus
we praise the liquid
Swallow quickly
before my sword
will cut your head off
Taste of beer we feel
scent of beer we smell
and big pleasure in our hearts
We are so proud
we are so loud
When we drink - noble nectar of gods
Our enemies
shall die
before the dawn
Soon we'll go
to the war
on battlefield
All abstainers
gonna meet this sword
beer will be our reward
So we hail
all beer warriors
with glory and pride !
Taste...
Next day
early morning
fire in the sky
swords in the wind
with power and might
do you want to die ?
We're so united
to defend
thrash metal's name
Heart of steel
crown and the ring
time to drink
powerfull nectar of gods !
Mógłbym prosić o opinie na temat tych tekstów ? Czy się nadają do czegoś itp ?
pieszczocha GŁADKA - DWA PASKI skóra naturalna
brelok AC/DC - LOGO
koszulka ELUVEITIE - PREMONITION B2B, USZKODZONA
brelok METALLICA - KILL'EM ALL/JUMP IN THE FIRE
Sugerowałem chłopakom zmianę, ale zostałem przegłosowany. Tzn kapela nazywa się KHRONOS. A to band jest tylko w adresie myspace'a. A do jakiej muzyki hmmm. To co gramy to taki szeroko pojęty thrash metal z moimi growlowanymi wokalami. Teksty są mało thrashowe, lub o zgrozo deathowe, ale jakoś nigdy nie jarałem się tematyką tekstów w tych stylistykach. Chyba, że lirykami w stylu Ch.Schuldinera, no ale niestety mój langłicz nie jest na tyle dobry, żeby się męczyć w takiej stylistyce. Chociaż jakby posiedzieć na słownikiem itp ;] No i młody jestem i nie mam jak narazie aż tak dużej mądrości życiowej, a swoich przeżyciach typu agresja itp pisać nie lubię, bo nie mam skłonności ekshibicjonistycznych.Np ten pierwszy utwór, to był w ogóle nasz pierwszy kawałek, kiedy jeszcze nie wiedzielismy, co chcemy grać. Utwór jest raczej bardziej death (tylko pod względem wokali)rockowy, więc i pozwoliłem sobie na tematykę r'n'r. A teksty wciąż poprawiam, i jak poprawie to zedytuję pierwszy post. I kapa, bo tekst musi też pasować pod melodię, a tłumaczyłem je ze szkieletów, które tam kiedyś powstały w języku polskim, więć cięzej mi było zachować sens pod względem melodyki.
Właśnie pozmieniałem w 1 i 6 pewne rzeczy. Nie są to wiersze, tylko teksty pisane do utworów, więc muszą pasować do melodii i tyle. A co do prostoty, to wiem, że przydałoby się więcej jakiś metafor, no ale tego z marszu wymyśleć się nie da. A rymy jak to napisałes krak - częst w metalu występują bardzo często, nie mówiąc o r'n'r czy punku, bo w deathie i thrashu tekściarze urzywają zapewne w większości słów, których znaczenia sami do końca nie znają 
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